郊游二首

深南大道

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">登山</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">尺璧堪豪换寸阴，寻幽步渫此登临。崖垂瀑布声犹近，风解衣襟汗已涔。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">险径覆苔惊路滑，馨葩隔岸叹沟深。何当直上巅峰宿，石枕天湖听浪吟。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">临水</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">莫负眸中景色优，富春江水好行舟。轻岚渐褪双峰现，骤雨倏倾万壑流。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">一线来潮虽几秒，三魂出窍已千秋。风平浪静之余问，<personname wst="on" productid="何日郎">何日郎</personname>君再度游。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">注：富春江乃钱塘江上游素有小三峡之称。另：本故事纯属虚构如有雷同实属巧合。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt;"><p></p></span></p>

云中鸾

<p>两首都是中两联好．起冗赘结游离(具体地说，其一莫名其妙地伪大，其二莫名其妙地轻浮）</p><p>——总体来说，比以前在总汇读的那个假愤青好看。</p><p>俺实在人说实在话，说错了，帅哥只管偷笑。</p>

草啸

<p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">一线来潮虽几秒，三魂出窍已千秋。</span></p><p>整体，觉二好于一。</p>

无稽斋主

骤雨倏倾万壑流。孤平！“<span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">一线来潮虽几秒，三魂出窍已千秋。</span>”赏此联！

红叶

同赏此联

深南大道

<p><strong><font face="Verdana" color="#61b713">云中鸾:1.其两手中二联个人更不喜,一手中二联有些并列未宕开,二手中二联数字太多且三联五字虚字,更显疲软.2.[愤青]诗集中确有,占十分之一3.已有五年没人叫俺帅锅了,又听到,很开心.4.喜燕子直言!</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="Verdana" color="#da2549">草啸:问好兄.实乃当时与诗友游戏笔墨之作.艳诗耳</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="Verdana" color="#da2549">无稽斋主:汗,倏,入声竟一直不知.,待改.拜谢!</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="Verdana" color="#61b713">红叶:问好兄!遥握</font></strong></p>

浔阳倦客

<p>大道这两个确有很大的想象空间</p><p>手法还是很不错的</p>