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随风而逝

<p>一<br/><br/>飞花落叶二十年，<br/>雨打风飘岁月迁。<br/>人物如棋长变幻，<br/>悲欢似梦短缠绵。<br/>曾将热血倾残壁，<br/>却为浮名抚断弦。<br/>忧喜且随流水去，<br/>一局一笑一陶然。<br/><br/>二<br/><br/>问君何处是天涯，<br/>翻作离歌向落花。<br/>一曲清商凋木叶，<br/>几番浊浪卷尘沙。<br/>遥遥春色迎朝雨，<br/>寂寂秋声送晚霞。<br/>笑指楸枰天下事，<br/>幽玄梦里度年华。<br/><br/>三<br/><br/>清乐棋中趣，<br/>忘忧唱晚风。<br/>阴阳歌已尽，<br/>黑白曲将终。<br/>低首知无限，<br/>抬头辨有穷。<br/>知音多少语，<br/>尽付手谈中。<br/><br/>四<br/><br/>手谈旧友相约至，<br/>不觉更阑夜已深。<br/>若有桃源堪避世，<br/>烂柯一梦到如今。<br/><br/>五<br/><br/>幼时曾作少年游，<br/>欲揽长河霸九州。<br/>指点江山轻世代，<br/>激扬文字骂王侯。<br/>哪知更有千番恨，<br/>谁道平添几许忧。<br/>身向楸枰清乐去，<br/>故知应笑我惭羞。<br/></p><p>请各位方家多多指教，谢谢！</p>

清扬婉兮

<p>师傅，你也来了啊？回来看到这个网址也注册了一个，嘿嘿，咱们又碰面了．</p>

清扬婉兮

<font size="4">终古闲情归落照，一春幽梦逐游丝，信回刚道别多时.</font>

鄱湖渔歌

热烈欢迎师徒二位![em23][em23][em23][em23][em23][em23]<br/>忧喜且随流水去，<br/>一局一笑一陶然。

浔阳倦客

<p>欢迎师徒先</p><p>总体颇通顺。</p><p>开砸后：</p><p>若有桃源堪避世，<br/>烂柯一梦到如今。欠顺</p><p>有些句子熟了些。其二只有一句是棋</p>

文若

楼主用的不是平水韵，但＂不觉更阑夜已深＂一句，如果不当平水解，这里＂觉＂做＂睡觉＂理解有些牵强，做＂觉得＂理解，就出律了．

随风而逝

<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#000000">多谢两位！</font></span></span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#000000">浔阳倦客前辈所说“若有桃源堪避世，烂柯一梦到如今。欠顺”，的确如此。桃源避世和王质烂柯典不合拍。棋如人生，若前辈亦喜手谈，当解其中之趣。</font></span></span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#000000">文若前辈所说不是平水韵，与我平时所学不同。第一首的韵都是下平声一先，第二首是下平声六麻，第三首是上平声一东，第四首是下平声十二侵，第五首是下平声十一尤。若论句中平仄，一局一笑一陶然句中的局字属入声二沃，出律，但“不觉更阑夜已深”句中的觉字应是入声三觉，属仄声，不出律。</font></span></span></span></p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><font color="#000000">作为初学者，我还不能自如表达，所以牵强之处很多，还请多指教。</font></span></span></span><br/></p></span></span></span>

文若

如果用平水，＂不觉更阑夜已深。＂处没有问题，但＂飞花落叶二十年，＂处＂十＂是入声，＂一局一笑一陶然。＂处＂局＂是入声，总不能韵用平水，句子里面就不用．

一得愚生

歡迎！幾處都是入聲字沒把握准。

随风而逝

后学末进，还请各位前辈多多指教，不胜荣幸，不胜感激。